The movie 'Bando'
· 2020-09-07
번호 : 48950 조회 : 413 작성자 : alnew06 2020-09-07 오후 2:50:47
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Yesterday, I watch the movie 'Bando' with my family. Because corona virus have been spreading around the world, we watch it in VOD. Sadly, we couldn't eat popcorn because we didn't go to the theater. But, we were happy for just watching it together. When we were watching it, I kept thinking about corona virus since the movie was very similar with corona-spresding reality.
But there were differences between them, too. First, while we are living normally in reality, in the movie, many people paniced and leaved the country. Last, zombie virus can make people crazy but corona virus can't.
How interesting! It was a fun movie because it suggests many things between it and reality!
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쨔자잔~♪♪♬ 축하해요!
친구의 일기가 이번달 베스트 일기로 선정되었어요!

Capital! Your writing is very impressive to me!
열심히 쓴 노력이 보이는 멋진 글이네요^^
몇 가지 수정하면 더욱 멋진 글이 될거예요^^

1. 시제에 유의해요
‘어제’ 일어난 일에 대해서 쓰고 있으므로 문장에서 과거형을 일정하게 유지해주세요.
또한, 불규칙적으로 변하는 동사의 과거형은 다시 한번 기억하도록해요.
I watch the movie 'Bando' with my family. -> I watched ~
many people paniced and leaved the country. -> ~ and left their country.
it suggests many things between it and reality! -> it suggested ~

2. 첫번째 문장에서 영화를 보게 된 이유가 코로나 때문이 아니라, ‘집’에서 보게 된 것이 코로나 때문이므로 문장에 ‘at home’이라는 표현이 들어가야 자연스럽습니다.
Yesterday, I watch the movie 'Bando' with my family. -> ~ with my family at home.

3. 영화와 현실의 다른점을 열거할 때, ‘First’와 같이 순서를 붙이는 것은 아주 좋지만, 이유가 2가지라면 ‘first’다음 ‘last’가 오는 것은 부자연스럽게 느껴집니다.
-> ‘first’ 다음 ‘secondly’ 정도가 오는 것이 적절하겠지요.


다음 영어일기도 멋진 글 기대할게요^^